Wanted: Critical, Nitpicky, Analytical, Readers!

I am having fun sharing the first chapter with people!!! I am asking for feedback and most have been very cooperative and wonderful!

I am willing... for a few of you who are interested... I would like to send out the first chapter for feedback. Edit, fix storyline for me... etc. I am interested in making it perfect. Do not tell me that it just doesn't bring you in, explain why, or what you would like to see. I am only sharing with serious people who are willing to help me perfect this. This is my future livelihood, please be terribly objective. :D

Okay! waiting for people to ask!

*EXCITED!!!!*

(Disclaimer: If I am not positive you will help me, or think you will only give me praise, or fear fraud, chapter will be refused for you.)

Have a great day!

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Holidays and colds have been keeping me from posting as much as I would like to. I beg your forgiveness for those of you clamoring for more. I shall do my best to satiate your thirst. ;)

The protagonists from my first book have been speaking to me again. I have started the third book in the series involving the Jewel. Joshua and Julia are now dancing across white pages and splattering their story with fantastic finesse. -Despite the from/form typos etc., of my very eager fingers. ;)

What a lovely way to start a day!

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